A thoughtful submission that fulfills the brief.
Feedback on assignment Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity
Notes from, and in addition to, our Skype tutorial :
We discussed how you have acted like a flaneur in making this work. Its worth checking out the book Psychogeography, plenty of references in it to the history of this ‘way of seeing’.
Sad to hear that permission to photograph was denied at LUFC.
Interesting that it was no problem to photograph at Sheffield station – we discussed the idea of privilege.
You have used a variety of vantage points, and this has still managed to retain a coherence, possibly due to them being the same viewpoints we would expect to find on a similar commute.
Your edit is arranged in an order that would make sense as a story of the journey.
You were also asking yourself ‘what is a crowd’? Looking for some purpose, an order, a seriality. This is really interesting, starting from a definition, from a commonly understood place is useful when attempting a critique.
To create images of interest you attempted a ‘frame within a frame’.
We discussed your bridge image using punctum and studium. It adhered to one of Barthes’ ideas in that, what the photographer intended is not necessarily what arrests the viewer’s attention. The side-lit woman in the middle ground for you and the clasped hands of the woman in the foreground for me.
References – Phillip-Lorca diCorcia, Beat Strueli, Paul Graham
You understood that the assignment was about a concern with aperture, forcing you to observe, being intuitive, having your antennae out – I think you have been successful here
The final image in the series is pushing the envelope of the definition ‘crowd’. It was a conscious decision on your part to attempt social commentary. You are to be commended for trying to use camera and technique to get create a political meaning for the work.
In attempting a narrative, perhaps the weakest image in the series is the first. Looking at the series purely aesthetically I would aim to tie red into this first shot – and leave an absence of red in the last as a prompt to encourage viewers to look further.
Take confidence from having moved out of your comfort zone and challenged yourself in making images of people..
Learning Logs or Blogs/Critical essays Context
With reference to the exercise shots of your dad – Bruce Gilden
Pu some of your thoughts on books you have read in your blog.
Suggested reading/viewing Context
Keep up with the books! See one reference above.
Pointers for the next assignment
For assignment 3 I suggest; keep it critical.